Yea i do that alone but then have these moments where I come up with perfect and amazing dialogue

I'm having a time right now where the characters are fighting me. I know what I want them to do and where I want the story to go but they just don't want to cooperate. I've always said the characters have a mind of their own and at some point they write the story

Lol

I thought they were flirting XD

Read it out loud/act it out is a good testing point. Read people are good dialogue-wise. In play writing, David Mamat is one of the top in the game. I also like Martin Mcdonagh.

Also consider the time period and personalities involved.

Like in the bit you shared, the repetition reads a bit awkward. Changing it to like

FLEET
Been two weeks now!

MARGARET
Three weeks -- unless you're getting fueled up somewhere I don't know about.

FLEET
What? Cheating? On you? for a pack of cigarettes? I'd never...

MARGARET
Really now?

FLEET
Damn straight.

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“A story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end, but not necessarily in that order.” — Godard

"Writing is a simple trick: all you have to do is sit and stare at a blank piece of paper, until beads of blood form on your forehead..." Larry Niven

What in the world was all that?

That was bot stuff. Mine was a quote about writing, since it's sort of how I feel today.

BRAIN BLEEDING?! Should seek some medical help for that

No, sweating blood. You know, like Jesus did on the cross?

He sweated blood? I thought that came from the holes they put in him lmao

That too.

But it's a quote from a famous author about how writing is both easy and hard at the same time. I figured it was appropriate.

not on the cross. in the Garden of Gethsemane

big brother was having a mental breakdown.

You're right. I'm tired.

that's fine. I actually just found out this channel. does it include fanfics? just curious.

Far as I know. I posted my only one.

good to know.

@isoboto seems to be the Writing Mod.