basically

I'm kind of forcing myself to write this tonight which is part of the problem

It's also a situation I've never been in so that doesn't help

makes sense

does anyone else get nights like this? where you simply can't write well?

yes

dialogue has never been my strongsuit but like

ugh
they say you get better at things when you do them enough but tonight is a perfect example of deadwood dialogue

anyone have any tips on writing dialogue?

because online I'm getting "read it out loud"

or the ever popular "make it relate to the plot"

Yea i do that alone but then have these moments where I come up with perfect and amazing dialogue

I'm having a time right now where the characters are fighting me. I know what I want them to do and where I want the story to go but they just don't want to cooperate. I've always said the characters have a mind of their own and at some point they write the story

Lol

I thought they were flirting XD

Read it out loud/act it out is a good testing point. Read people are good dialogue-wise. In play writing, David Mamat is one of the top in the game. I also like Martin Mcdonagh.

Also consider the time period and personalities involved.

Like in the bit you shared, the repetition reads a bit awkward. Changing it to like

FLEET
Been two weeks now!

MARGARET
Three weeks -- unless you're getting fueled up somewhere I don't know about.

FLEET
What? Cheating? On you? for a pack of cigarettes? I'd never...

MARGARET
Really now?

FLEET
Damn straight.

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That was bot stuff. Mine was a quote about writing, since it's sort of how I feel today.

BRAIN BLEEDING?! Should seek some medical help for that