Message from @dastenhero

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2021-01-20 05:25:34 UTC  

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/801170162957942885/801321504108576778/Bad_dialogue.PNG

2021-01-20 05:25:58 UTC  

This takes place in a gas station. I'm trying to imply that the two have had some casual hookups behind the counter before but I'm failing miserably

2021-01-20 05:26:47 UTC  

She gets killed off shortly thereafter by some guys who come in for no reason other than they need to fuel up I guess?

2021-01-20 05:26:58 UTC  

*No witnesses.*

2021-01-20 05:28:41 UTC  

You do scriptwriting?

2021-01-20 05:28:45 UTC  

yes

2021-01-20 05:28:47 UTC  

I want to at least

2021-01-20 05:28:51 UTC  

neat

2021-01-20 05:28:54 UTC  

I do creative writing

2021-01-20 05:28:56 UTC  

erm

2021-01-20 05:28:57 UTC  

wait

2021-01-20 05:28:59 UTC  

That came otu wrong

2021-01-20 05:29:06 UTC  

oh no lol you good

2021-01-20 05:29:10 UTC  

the generic storytelling writing

2021-01-20 05:29:13 UTC  

yeah

2021-01-20 05:29:31 UTC  

tbh I think creative writing is a weird term as technically, all writing is creative

2021-01-20 05:29:40 UTC  

all except blogs

2021-01-20 05:29:51 UTC  

unless you're like me tonight lol

2021-01-20 05:29:51 UTC  

I think they're just referring to Storytelling

2021-01-20 05:30:04 UTC  

I'mma start calling it Storytelling which is what it is basically

2021-01-20 05:31:24 UTC  

basically

2021-01-20 05:31:40 UTC  

I'm kind of forcing myself to write this tonight which is part of the problem

2021-01-20 05:31:53 UTC  

It's also a situation I've never been in so that doesn't help

2021-01-20 05:31:59 UTC  

makes sense

2021-01-20 05:41:01 UTC  

does anyone else get nights like this? where you simply can't write well?

2021-01-20 05:45:20 UTC  

yes

2021-01-20 05:57:12 UTC  

dialogue has never been my strongsuit but like

2021-01-20 05:57:42 UTC  

ugh
they say you get better at things when you do them enough but tonight is a perfect example of deadwood dialogue

2021-01-20 06:01:46 UTC  

anyone have any tips on writing dialogue?

2021-01-20 06:01:56 UTC  

because online I'm getting "read it out loud"

2021-01-20 06:02:14 UTC  

or the ever popular "make it relate to the plot"

2021-01-20 06:13:17 UTC  

Yea i do that alone but then have these moments where I come up with perfect and amazing dialogue

I'm having a time right now where the characters are fighting me. I know what I want them to do and where I want the story to go but they just don't want to cooperate. I've always said the characters have a mind of their own and at some point they write the story

2021-01-20 07:13:22 UTC  

Lol

2021-01-20 07:14:02 UTC  

I thought they were flirting XD

2021-01-20 12:55:20 UTC  

Read it out loud/act it out is a good testing point. Read people are good dialogue-wise. In play writing, David Mamat is one of the top in the game. I also like Martin Mcdonagh.

Also consider the time period and personalities involved.

2021-01-20 12:59:06 UTC  

Like in the bit you shared, the repetition reads a bit awkward. Changing it to like

FLEET
Been two weeks now!

MARGARET
Three weeks -- unless you're getting fueled up somewhere I don't know about.

FLEET
What? Cheating? On you? for a pack of cigarettes? I'd never...

MARGARET
Really now?

FLEET
Damn straight.

2021-01-20 13:57:08 UTC  

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