Well, I think you just summed up like 90% of humanity in a poem. Impressive.

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I'm meh about most poetry, including the dreck that I write. I'm impressed with this. Nice work.

i'm not so good at it, too. usually it goes where it goes. thank you for your compliment 😊

Call it like I see it.

I really like this poem as it sums up a lot of people

in a good way

we're always pushed to be the best and honestly, I can respect the people who are just like this; who simply want a simple life

Thank you 😊 😊 😊

Read, read, read. Think. And make notes. The goal is to actively add to your subconscious.

Take your social media pages and kill them with fire. Revive only if you have solid ideas.

It looks really good! Why do you feel unsatisfied with the ending? I know it’s a stupid question and you probably know why, but sometimes I find it helps to ask why I’m not satisfied with something or don’t feel it’s good enough. Personally, I feel it might be that the ending doesn’t seem to fit in with the rest of the poem, but that’s just me.

yeah. i think i haven't explored the ending fully yet. like i want to expand on the idea that "what if i want a simple life because i am not willing to change" -- although it may seems out of topic since the first two parts are about "dreaming of simple things"

I feel like they’re pretty similar themes. As long as it’s not something really off of what the poem has said or conveyed so far, I think it can fit. But yeah, I would play around with the possibilities

i'm mucking around with it. i think i'll sleep on it for a bit more and see what else can i come up with. i've a few other scattered points that i may be able to combine with this

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@Book, OK, I will ping you at the start of the next 3 sprints.

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@MofoDoggo, OK, I will ping you at the start of the next 3 sprints.

My first poem (already posted in #Arts and Crafts...didn’t think to post it here)

Second poem

Third

is that just various shades of said emotion or does it decrease in strength as you go outward?

@Lich King Good question. Kinda looks like it could be used that way.
So cool to see writers in here!!

Thanks for the reading material!

After reading RSVP, why did you decide to name it that?

A light in the Mirror is beautiful, I must say.

As for the Haiku, it's interesting. The point of haiku is to provoke meditation over what it means, correct?

RSVP is an initialism for the French phrase “Respondez s’il vous plaît” which is an important response from the poem.
How does one reach the top of Maslow’s pyramid? Achieve self actualization and enlightenment?
It’s by surrendering to the now. Living in the moment. Being who you are. Having preferences. Pursuing them. “Respondez s’il vous plaît” literally translated means “respond if you please”. In other words, if you have a preference for something, respond in action. Live YOUR life. That’s how you self actualize.

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This one was inspired one winter morning when I looked out my kitchen window and saw my neighbor’s garage roof glistening with frost in the morning sun. I went back 15 minutes later (or so) and it was gone.
Zen is about living in the now, appreciating the moment. The fact that the sunlight was both the source of the glistening beauty and the death of it seemed appropriately Zen to me.

Well, yes.
I wasn't asking for an explanation of the poem, that kind of kills the fun of it. But it is really cool that you wrote it, regardless. 🙂

I was having fun pondering it.

Sorry. I have a teaching background so explaining things is a natural tendency 😂

College professor?

Also, are you US or Canada?

Applied mathematician. Worked as a lead math tutor at an after school and weekend learning center.
U.S.

Cool.

I have always been retarded at math.

Now work as an energy engineer for a mechanical contracting company, saving buildings energy and coordinating with local utilities to get incentive/rebate money for the upgrades.