I suppose I don't think so

The point, I think, is that they aren't fully supported (and are suffering as a result).

Although relative disadvantage is pretty useful when demonstrating that there is a problem, it is difficult when it comes to making the issue matter. Because relative disadvantage doesn't really matter by itself

But at the same time

I don't really have numbers, data on the real impact on boys for any of this.

So perhaps simply being at a disadvantage is all I can make a direct point

Relative disadvantage would had mattered a lot if it was girls that were disadvantaged

Yes, yes it would

We can call it a disadvantage then

Sure

Sorry, I was thinking aloud, the gist of the paper probably ultimately is boys being at a disadvantage

I'm just slightly dissatisfied with stopping there

but also want to keep very grounded in evidence

@asparkofpyrokravte I bet it seems like it's getting ridiculously long to 'get it right'... But it's worth it mate

I'm sorry to have told you that it seems wrong. But you need to know

Buddy, I'm literally asking for it

Doesn't make me not feel bad about it lol. It's like, you know its wrong but dont wanna offend someone who's obviously trying hard!!

Your effort is so worthwhile, I can't really write it for you and please keep on :3

I have finished reading the article

The ending is very good

Only the beginning need some edits

I think mind was cut off, but I got wrapped up in talking about the start

That would depend on the title thogh

For me it ends "boys in the start ..."

That is really weird

I can't even find where that phrase is in the article

I'm sure it's just my useless phone

I can't either

This is the one that never seems to break though, so I keep using it

I had two edges, but they both broke as soon as they were dropped

Tell you what ill screenshot just so you know I'm not full of shit

Cut off at a different point this time

My apologies for not being good enough to display the full fruits of your efforts

You're basically at the end in that screenshot

Your studies I've looked into. They're good.

Your opening still need work.

"Now, there are other issues boys face in education, but most of those are somewhat removed from the actual schooling. The effect of fatherlessness for example, may very well dwarf everything I've mentioned in the article so far, but that isn't something the school systems themselves can deal with. In any case, that topic is for another article."

That's the final paragraph

so you have the whole thing more or less

Thanks for the feedback, I'll give the opening another shot