Message from @asparkofpyrokravte
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Anyways
Those are some ideas I/Hadashi can pick through
Concerning the introduction, if you assume one of those titles, does the introduction work?
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"Boys on average get lower grades in school compared to girls. This is almost universally true. There are several ways in which boys have particular issues with regard to schooling as compared to girls that cause this gap. What can be done about those issues? Well, it's complicated. There are some things that appear to be solvable or at least mitigated by school system, but some of the differences seem intractable, and everything is mired in politics. What follows is a summary of boys' issues with schooling, how those are being addressed, and hopefully a little of why those issues should be important to you."
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Or is there some bit that ought to be improved still?
Minor nitpicks... Because Americans *do* tend to think about the US as the extent of the universe, I would put 'Throughout the world this is found to be the case' rather than universally true.
'By **the** school system'
Personally I think any of the titles work. But it does matter that it seems right to you specifically
Title atm: "Our Boys' Schooling Issues"
"Boys on average get lower grades in school compared to girls. This is true worldwide. There are several ways in which boys have particular issues with regard to schooling as compared to girls that cause this gap. What can be done about those issues? Well, it's complicated. There are some things that appear to be solvable or at least mitigated by the school system, but some of the differences seem intractable, and everything is mired in politics. What follows is a summary of boys' issues with schooling, how those are being addressed, and hopefully a little of why those issues should be important to you."
There are parallels between the title and the final sentence of the introduction. I am content-ish
And I'm also not opposed to doing more revisions
I think you've done a lot of hard work on it all mate and it shows :3
@Men Are Human Use revision 3 just above when you read tomorrow/today.
@asparkofpyrokravte will do
Just started reading. I'll highlight any bits I edit.
@Men Are Human Thoughts so far?
I kinda liked the intro to version 2 actually.
We could well merge it a bit
Not much, but a little.
I'll have to see about it later, I've been kinda screwed over for writing this week. Had the landlord in ripping the house apart with masive wall-coring drill. It's like being stuck in a dentist. Lol
It's all done now, so I should be back on the horse today or tomorrow. I'm really looking forward to reading this properly
Just launched a new article on Men Are Human @everyone !
That has one significant omission unless a previous article has discussed it
Give that a read. While the wikipedia page specifically calls out affirmative action, any "ameliorative" reason can be given for a discriminatory law
basically this has its roots in the charter of rights in 1982, though specific wording saying that discriminating against men is ok might have been from the Employment Equity Act that is mentioned (1995/1986)
Thanks a lot. Do you want to write up a patch for the article? Or maybe a follow up
Hrm...I'm not sure. That's something I'd more discuss with BlueOrange22. The article stands on its own quite well, despite what I said. It would be possible to mention this at the bottom of "how this happened", referencing how the law doens't violate the charter despite the charter guaranteeing sexual equality under the law on account of the broad exception of section 15.2. Or one could make a paragraph towards the bottom of "It Gets Worse", noting that this is part of a long Canadian trend of creating trapdoors to avoid gender equality.
BlueOrange22 isn't here under that name though
Come to think of it, if he's Canadian, he may have omitted it on purpose to focus on the Employment Equity Act since it happened only a few years after the Charter.
Basically "it's all fun and games until someone gets equality" (loved that article) is a Canadian thing too, only in the case of Employment Equity feminists have been more careful about avoiding it so that someone like the NCFM can't fix things through litigation. (link: https://menarehuman.com/all-fun-and-games/)
@asparkofpyrokravte Thanks, I'm glad to hear you liked it. :) Maybe this should be a separate article. Basically a 'how the hell did this happen?'
Honestly, there isn't much more to discuss in a separate article though
You might be right, though I was thinking it could cover other times they have done this
That's the only other fact, so one'd just be drawing a narrative of how gender equality activists have been careful about avoiding mandating equality for *everyone*
Hmmm
I think you could build that case, though I will add the note when I get home
This being unlike similar countries of course. I'd hate writing an article with so few concrete things though.