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@Kanobiobiwan I believe I took care of Armed Trow. See the same post but in <#806143039215108116>
what was the question/need?
Ok so
P l o t p i t c h
This is a faith based horror film I'm considering writing as a first feature film, despite having barely any experience writing much of anything in a long format.
It basically follows a six year old girl (considering changing it to a boy; idk. I don't want the inspiration, Poltergeist's Carol Anne, to show through too much.) in the 1960s or 1970s (maybe 90s. I need candles to be a plausible thing versus nightlights) who is essentially tricked into befriending a little demon in the woods.
The demon presents itself as the spirit of a little girl who starved to death after her parents died in a fire in the late 1800s. She is my attempt to take the tired old "creepy little ghost girl with dirty white dress and long black hair that covers her face" and make it into something actually frightening and fresh - basically, I changed her into a feral child dressed in rags and covered in mud who crawls on all fours and eats raw squirrels.
She's "nice" at first and manipulates the main character, Agnes (name in progress) into bringing her "offerings" in the form of various toys and trinkets. She then guilt trips/blackmails Agnes from making new friends by scaring her, giving her nightmares, and breaking her things if she hangs out with other kids her age. It starts with things like hair clips and dolls and escalates to straight up stealing.
As a way to combat the nightmares, Agnes's mom tells her that if she keeps a candle lit next to her bed, the nightmares will stop. The demon has a habit of knocking at her window and opening it at night and Agnes decides that the candle will keep her at bay. The parents have no idea their daughter is interacting with something that is real and they think she's just sleepwalking or something. So, they tuck Agnes in, pray that she stay safe, and they light the candle without a thought. To Agnes's delight, the candle works - but only at the window.
Here's where the main "memorable" part begins
Basically, this family ends up having candles placed at every single window and every single doorway in the house. (Major fire hazard and kind of stupid, but these parents are desperate.)
Agnes continues to be harassed by the demon as she distances herself from it and she starts lying to her parents about why she can't go to sleep at night. She routinely gives it power by offering her toys to it in hopes that it will go away, but it keeps getting stronger.
There's a brief potential subplot where they try to get medications for Agnes (something I'll have to look into as this is a historical setting and meds may not have been a thing at that point, especially at such a young age)
The climax occurs when Agnes goes to a sleepover and the parents neglect to light the candles in their house. The house is trashed and the demon realizes Agnes isn't there. Meanwhile, one of her sleepover mates snuffs her candle and Agnes gets literally dragged off towards the cave as the demon can now get to her. The parents call in a priest that has been showing up earlier in the plot (I have some vague ideas of scenes to introduce him in and make him important to the plot) and the demon tries convincing Agnes that it's just a lonely spirit. Agnes is buying it but the demon really just wants to kill her.
The plot twist is that it's a demon all along and that the candles were doing nothing - it was the parents' prayers that were keeping it at bay.
is there gonna be a sort of Van Helsing character? or is that the role of the priest?
basically, yes
on another note, i cant help but think that the demon looks like the girl from that wolf walker's show or whatever its called
that is actually exactly what I was going for
I saw that trailer and got part of the idea
I'm still vague on the end and I've borrowed a *lot* of inspiration from various medias, some of which I haven't seen (Wolfwalkers being the one I know I haven't seen)
I'm still trying to decide if I have something solid or not. It's part Poltergeist, part Creepypasta (PenPals), part Wolfwalkers trailer, part The Ring, and part The Exorcist with a little bit of Annabelle in there as well. Also drawn from some personal experiences, though mine chalked up to me needing a med change. Some stuff I still can't explain though, so I won't rule out supernatural stuffs.
(Annabelle was hot garbage though.)
i think as long as it isnt completely obvious you should be fine
Gotcha
I got the initial idea from a Jenny Nicholson video where she said not to steal the idea of a "candle lady" lol
idk if it's too boring at first? It really doesn't get too scary until the climax
a couple dead squirrels and the feeling that the girl is in danger is it
not really
i guess you could sort of add visions maybe? of stuff that might happen whenever the demon screws with her
so theres technically danger, but its not real, or at least not yet
true
I've toyed with the idea of making her "shadowy" which is what I've seen in real life
I don't know if that's too close to The Ring though
also gives away the twist of her being a demon . I want the audience to think she's a ghost for the first 90% of the film to the point where they almost sympathize with it right before the twist
So this is basically a fictional story, and yes I'm really bad at writing stories trust me
It basically follows a 20 year old man named Rex, and he was basically once a broke college student back then. Suddenly, everything changed for Rex and he decided to work at a grocery store, just to meet a new friend, a customer, that could change his life forever.
Then, minutes later, Rex finally finished his 6-hour job at the grocery store, and then met the friend shown on his phone. And his name was Ajax Reinheim. He is only 21 years old, also a college student, but a rich kid from a family who has a history of making traditional pastries and selling them throughout the world.
Ajax met Rex after he (Rex) finished his 6 hour job at a grocery store, and then talked about what their interests are, so far and so forth.
Decent enough start.