Message from @makki
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oo
Oh
Now do a critique of mine
Hehehehehe
Hold on, gimme a minute.
I like the interactions but am a bit lost on who is who. Maybe adding some visual description to each of the people; introduce them through their position in the room?
The "confession" would be great
on this I mean
Aaaaa
Is the confession a gay love confession?
spoilers bro
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yes
Yeah
definitely avoid that in the beginning; it feels like we just met the characters
95% possible
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5% not
unless the story starts with that, a la Crazy Rich Asians
Yep
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I'd have the relationship be pre-existing in that case. At least have them be friends perhaps? I can't imagine going over to someone's house on a first meeting
Summary: There is this one dude pretending to be broke and realized he was rich
Yep sure
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Yah ill do it on my notepad
like legit that's how people disappear
Yea
I'm originally a wattpad writer
Because LMAO
I write angst
And sad stuff
that last part was really funny
is it just bits and pieces of the whole story?
I'll write the full one tho
But not here
😆
My advise on angst and sad stuff, having written it for a very long time (I had a couple fanfictions myself, lol. Someone get me a William Dafoe meme of that.) - don't do it for the sake of sadness and angst. Being edgy is something that comes of as incredibly cheap and cheap tear jerkers are subject to much more criticism
Ye lol
I made a story once