"Ah, which confession, Rex?" Ajax also added. "Is it... you're rich, or is it something else, hmm?"

Thank you! I tried, lol. Any suggestions are greatly appreciated!

Now read mine aa

"Uhm, a different type of confession, Ajax..." Rex was indeed shy.

I am lol

"Ooh, tell me, tell me!!!" Ajax was excited, very excited to hear about Rex's so-called "Confession"

(man this is going to be soo good)

I like the concept, but I'm kind of confused at the conversation pieces afterwards. Also, I'm busy writing my next bit for the story. I've skipped ahead a little, but I think this teaser will give something to look forward to.

Which?

Story?

Something initially written for Sgt. Barkley for his birthday, and by popular demand I have kept going with it.

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Oh

Now do a critique of mine

Hehehehehe

Hold on, gimme a minute.

I like the interactions but am a bit lost on who is who. Maybe adding some visual description to each of the people; introduce them through their position in the room?

The "confession" would be great

on this I mean

Aaaaa

Is the confession a gay love confession?

spoilers bro

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yes

Yeah

definitely avoid that in the beginning; it feels like we just met the characters

95% possible

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5% not

unless the story starts with that, a la Crazy Rich Asians

Yep

94-95% possible

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I'd have the relationship be pre-existing in that case. At least have them be friends perhaps? I can't imagine going over to someone's house on a first meeting

Summary: There is this one dude pretending to be broke and realized he was rich

Yep sure

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Yah ill do it on my notepad

like legit that's how people disappear

Yea