And WHfantasy is much further behind

But yes, I did take heavy inspiration from Warhammer and Tolkien

This is good. I wouldn't change substance; the only thing you need to work on is the grammar. Periods, commas, capital letters, etc.

Also, when characters address each other in dialogue, their names are typically set off from the rest of the sentence with a comma or two. (Example 1: "Thank you, Matilda. That's very kind of you." Example 2: "I know what he said, Joseph, but I don't understand what he *means.*")

"Sir" is usually marked off by a comma, too. "Thank you, sir." "Yes I do, sir." "What do you mean, sir?" You can leave the comma out for "no sir, yes sir," but otherwise it's best to keep it in.

Hope this helps!

Thanks

You're welcome. 😃

Regardless, it’s good

Thank you, what did you think of it?

any ideas for articles, going for a more economic type article

like fee.org 's articles

We Will Be Clean
How do I say something. That doesn't make someone mad?
Or how to listen? Without feeling so bad.
I'm trying to keep going, trying to keep moving forward.
I've got my eyes on the prize, got my shield and my long sword.
But I'm told to not use it. Cause who wants all the violence?
But I think what is worse is when we all sit in silence.
We've got to never stop trying, stop pushing, stop leading
We've got to always keep fighting just to stop all the bleeding.

The bleeding of us all.
When one falls that means we all have to fall.
Right now all we can do is crawl.
But we'll get there, someday we'll make the leap.
And one day it will all seep into the fabric of it all.
Washing us like a mother bathes her baby.

And maybe, just maybe.
We will be clean.

A poem written by a conservative trapped in a land of liberalism

@MrAconite some of the rhyming is really great. i like the second verse. something about the shortness of the sentences deliver the point & the message better than the first verse's longer sentences

Thank you. I remember when I wrote it, once my pencil started moving it didnt stop lol.

Then I had to recite it to the class. All very liberal individuals

Beautiful.

i feel ya. the emotions can be one-of-a-kind experience

struggling with a project i've been working on for just over a year now. Usually when i am writing a scene, i tend to have music that reflects the emotions i need the characters to feel blasting while writing. brutal death metal for fights, sad/tragic classical opera for tragic scenes etc etc.
recently been stuck on one part for the better part of 3 weeks now, and my music trick just is not working properly as i have rewritten it probably 5 times over by now. curious if anyone has tips/tricks they use to set their mood to set the writing mood, if that makes sense.

Usually I use the same tricks you use, so if that does not work, then I'm out of ideas, sorry.

I really admire when people write poems in rhyme. Seems that a lot of the poets just kinda let that go, at least the poetry I read in school

also, great poem

Thank you! I appreciate that

the modern poems are less rhyming now (at least, from what i read)

so it seems, and why is that?

rupi kaur effect i supposed

less people care about poetry. making it short can put them all in social media posts

I rarely write poetry, and I don't rhyme because they're all spur of the moment.

I care less about poetry than I should. It is absolutely true that not a whole lot of people are interested in poetry anymore.

Ancient poetry and songs were constructed specifically with memnotics (i'm spelling that wrong) in mind to help people remember them. The structure of the work itself aided in its popularity

Something else is the fact that postmodernists believe that nothing can be objectively "Better" than any other thing. This is why they laud a smear of menstrual blood on canvas as an incredible work of art while at the same time dismissing people like De Vinci.

What they've said about poetry is that it doesn't need to rhyme or make any sort of structural sense. So if that's what you believe, why would you pressure your students into doing things like rhyming or following poetic structure?

I see why now

In becoming perhaps too accepting of art, we have destroyed/disdained that which used to be considered art

now it's edgy to write in rhyme

i remember memorizing an entire story of a battle and it was easy because the entire thing was in rhyme and in four-line stanzas. Sure it was difficult to write, but it's very easy to remember that tale

indeed. there is a beauty in rhyming itself

art standards shift throughout the year so i do not believe we "destroyed/disdained" necessarily

more like "temporarily cast aside"

For sure, what the left doesn't realize is that they've fostered an entire generation who refuses to have children, meanwhile religious families are having upwards of anywhere between 5-10 at a time.

"Temporarily cast aside" indeed.

I sit
I listen
I expect that spit
On my face shall glisten
By those around me I am mocked
I sit, as I am, in my sorrow
My feelings locked
I’m alone
One

I think
I’m on edge
I stand on the brink
Of a chasm, there I pledge
But why do I pledge. What do I swear
I know not. I’m empty
I’m a cup
Empty
Two

I believe
I realize that
I need not leave
This world to find what
I search for. He awaits. I jump
The ledge, gone. No ground
Beneath my feet
My Hope is found
To Him I leap
Three

First time writing a poem of this type + tried to make it rhyme

So I’m sorry if it is unsatisfactory

Dude, it's awesome!

Thank you, I appreciate it!