Message from @Kriegs Commissar McCraw
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Speaking of (hope no one minds this):
why are you gay
Bunch of *Bastards!*
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Grab a pair that's off and strangle him with it, that'd be the easiest
I like the idea a lot though
I don't think it's been done before
It's kinda like how Hannibal kills in the show by the same name - any patients/colleagues that are rude to him end up on his platter
I fucking love that show <:SadPepe:801485397678489660>
Alright, posting again. Because I somehow accidentally deleted my last post.
If we are going to fight to take the culture back, it means replacing DC, replacing Marvel, replacing Disney Plus. I don't know if we can do it, but if we are then we're not going to do it with weak sissy shit.
People are attracted to universes like WH40K for a reason, and I'm hoping to lay the groundwork for a shared cinematic universe that gives Disney a run for it's money. That being said, here's some insight into that shared cinematic universe.
Need some help with that? These sites might have it:
Cirsova Magazine (www.cirsova.wordpress.com)
SuperversiveSF (www.superversivesf.com)
Doomed Scholar Studios (www.doomedscholarstudios.com)
Silver Empire Publishing (www.silverempire.org)
IndieGen.xyz (www.indiegen.xyz)
Castalia House (www.castaliahouse.com)
Tuscany Bay Books (www.tuscanybaybooks.com)
Periapsis Press (www.periapsispress.com)
Helping Writers Become Authors (www.helpingwritersbecomeauthors.com)
If you're looking for fellowship fighting against the tide, these are good places to find it (or at least some fresh perspectives/new fiction!).
(How would guys improve this? I wanted some opinions other then my bro's)
Tazaar's eyes left the festive scene below and roamed onto Rourkest, where he flinched slightly.
"Is something wrong General?" In a dry, half mocking tone Rourkest called out Tazaar
"Yes Rourkest, something is wrong, when we will you decide that severe injury is sufficient enough cause for a man to retire?"
Tellbourne groaned, smacking his head into his hands he muttered "not this conversation again you stupid fools" nobody heard him
Rourkest replied "Never General, I'll die in this army, and I'll refuse everything but"
"You have to take a pill from the alchemists guild every month or you'll die."
"Every two months"
"That's hardly any better, and you have a diet"
"Which is hardly different from the 'food' that the mess serves"
"You look like a rat that's been rubbed half to death with sand paper"
"It's of no matter"
"No. it is, I'm worried you're traumatizing the new recruits, and they haven't even seen the battle field yet"
"Better in the safety of the barracks then the craters in a battlefield"
Sensing an inevitable loss, Tazaar decided to take a different route "How long have you practiced this argument Rourkest?"
There was a long pause, Rourkest scratched his scarred chin, before deliberately exploring the hollow pocket where his one his cheeks was missing, just to agitate Tazaar
"Too long sir"
"In defence of your service to the republic"
"Yes sir"
"Can't you just retire a hero?"
"No"
"You're stupid"
"I know sir"
Tellbourne interrupted the next pause, "if you two 'gentlemen' are done arguing like children, we have a more important task of leading soldiers"
Rourkest chuckled and nodded, conceding his point, He walked past Tazaar, and grabbed a book off the bookcase, a book he had already memorized every word of, and went back to his chair to wait out the hour for Paltoceptus and his children that he got the privilege of marching away with, to get out of the way.
How To Kill An Elf was a very enthralling read.
(Its a fantasy with technology similar to shortly before WW1)
so like Warhammer 40k?
No
Its "what if I took WW1 and made it magical"
WH40K is in the future
But yes, I did take heavy inspiration from Warhammer and Tolkien
This is good. I wouldn't change substance; the only thing you need to work on is the grammar. Periods, commas, capital letters, etc.
Also, when characters address each other in dialogue, their names are typically set off from the rest of the sentence with a comma or two. (Example 1: "Thank you, Matilda. That's very kind of you." Example 2: "I know what he said, Joseph, but I don't understand what he *means.*")
"Sir" is usually marked off by a comma, too. "Thank you, sir." "Yes I do, sir." "What do you mean, sir?" You can leave the comma out for "no sir, yes sir," but otherwise it's best to keep it in.
Hope this helps!
Thanks
You're welcome. 😃
Regardless, it’s good
Thank you, what did you think of it?
any ideas for articles, going for a more economic type article
like fee.org 's articles
We Will Be Clean
How do I say something. That doesn't make someone mad?
Or how to listen? Without feeling so bad.
I'm trying to keep going, trying to keep moving forward.
I've got my eyes on the prize, got my shield and my long sword.
But I'm told to not use it. Cause who wants all the violence?
But I think what is worse is when we all sit in silence.
We've got to never stop trying, stop pushing, stop leading
We've got to always keep fighting just to stop all the bleeding.
The bleeding of us all.
When one falls that means we all have to fall.
Right now all we can do is crawl.
But we'll get there, someday we'll make the leap.
And one day it will all seep into the fabric of it all.
Washing us like a mother bathes her baby.
And maybe, just maybe.
We will be clean.
A poem written by a conservative trapped in a land of liberalism
@MrAconite some of the rhyming is really great. i like the second verse. something about the shortness of the sentences deliver the point & the message better than the first verse's longer sentences
Thank you. I remember when I wrote it, once my pencil started moving it didnt stop lol.
Then I had to recite it to the class. All very liberal individuals
Beautiful.
i feel ya. the emotions can be one-of-a-kind experience
struggling with a project i've been working on for just over a year now. Usually when i am writing a scene, i tend to have music that reflects the emotions i need the characters to feel blasting while writing. brutal death metal for fights, sad/tragic classical opera for tragic scenes etc etc.
recently been stuck on one part for the better part of 3 weeks now, and my music trick just is not working properly as i have rewritten it probably 5 times over by now. curious if anyone has tips/tricks they use to set their mood to set the writing mood, if that makes sense.
Usually I use the same tricks you use, so if that does not work, then I'm out of ideas, sorry.
I really admire when people write poems in rhyme. Seems that a lot of the poets just kinda let that go, at least the poetry I read in school
also, great poem
Thank you! I appreciate that