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Down his throat, then opened.
I would not male all the murders close together in time
I would space them out between 10 to 15 years
Because not everyone is that triggering
And he would also have to take time off to fly to where the assholes were
Working in a call center doesn't pay all that much.
Always a summer vacation by bus. Or car.
For exceptionally deserving people, the "My relative "died"."
Right? But who many grandmas does he have ?
That's why special occasions only.
And there's always aunts, uncles, etc.
Whats this chanell
It's for writers and aspiring writers to come and discuss writing.
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Speaking of (hope no one minds this):
why are you gay
Bunch of *Bastards!*
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I like the idea a lot though
I don't think it's been done before
It's kinda like how Hannibal kills in the show by the same name - any patients/colleagues that are rude to him end up on his platter
I fucking love that show <:SadPepe:801485397678489660>
Alright, posting again. Because I somehow accidentally deleted my last post.
If we are going to fight to take the culture back, it means replacing DC, replacing Marvel, replacing Disney Plus. I don't know if we can do it, but if we are then we're not going to do it with weak sissy shit.
People are attracted to universes like WH40K for a reason, and I'm hoping to lay the groundwork for a shared cinematic universe that gives Disney a run for it's money. That being said, here's some insight into that shared cinematic universe.
Need some help with that? These sites might have it:
Cirsova Magazine (www.cirsova.wordpress.com)
SuperversiveSF (www.superversivesf.com)
Doomed Scholar Studios (www.doomedscholarstudios.com)
Silver Empire Publishing (www.silverempire.org)
IndieGen.xyz (www.indiegen.xyz)
Castalia House (www.castaliahouse.com)
Tuscany Bay Books (www.tuscanybaybooks.com)
Periapsis Press (www.periapsispress.com)
Helping Writers Become Authors (www.helpingwritersbecomeauthors.com)
If you're looking for fellowship fighting against the tide, these are good places to find it (or at least some fresh perspectives/new fiction!).
(How would guys improve this? I wanted some opinions other then my bro's)
Tazaar's eyes left the festive scene below and roamed onto Rourkest, where he flinched slightly.
"Is something wrong General?" In a dry, half mocking tone Rourkest called out Tazaar
"Yes Rourkest, something is wrong, when we will you decide that severe injury is sufficient enough cause for a man to retire?"
Tellbourne groaned, smacking his head into his hands he muttered "not this conversation again you stupid fools" nobody heard him
Rourkest replied "Never General, I'll die in this army, and I'll refuse everything but"
"You have to take a pill from the alchemists guild every month or you'll die."
"Every two months"
"That's hardly any better, and you have a diet"ย
"Which is hardly different from the 'food' that the mess serves"
"You look like a rat that's been rubbed half to death with sand paper"
"It's of no matter"
"No. it is,ย I'm worried you're traumatizing the new recruits, and they haven't even seen the battle field yet"
"Better in the safety of the barracks then the craters in a battlefield"
Sensing an inevitable loss, Tazaar decided to take a different route "How long have you practiced this argument Rourkest?"
There was a long pause, Rourkest scratched his scarred chin, before deliberately exploring the hollow pocket where his one his cheeks was missing, just to agitate Tazaar
"Too long sir"
"In defence of your service to the republic"
"Yes sir"
"Can't you just retire a hero?"
"No"
"You're stupid"
"I know sir"
Tellbourne interrupted the next pause, "if you two 'gentlemen' are done arguing like children, we have a more important task of leading soldiers"
Rourkest chuckled and nodded, conceding his point, He walked past Tazaar, and grabbed a book off the bookcase, a book he had already memorized every word of, and went back to his chair to wait out the hour for Paltoceptus and his children that he got the privilege of marching away with, to get out of the way.
How To Kill An Elf was a very enthralling read.
(Its a fantasy with technology similar to shortly before WW1)
so like Warhammer 40k?
No
Its "what if I took WW1 and made it magical"
WH40K is in the future
And WHfantasy is much further behind
But yes, I did take heavy inspiration from Warhammer and Tolkien
This is good. I wouldn't change substance; the only thing you need to work on is the grammar. Periods, commas, capital letters, etc.
Also, when characters address each other in dialogue, their names are typically set off from the rest of the sentence with a comma or two. (Example 1: "Thank you, Matilda. That's very kind of you." Example 2: "I know what he said, Joseph, but I don't understand what he *means.*")
"Sir" is usually marked off by a comma, too. "Thank you, sir." "Yes I do, sir." "What do you mean, sir?" You can leave the comma out for "no sir, yes sir," but otherwise it's best to keep it in.
Hope this helps!
Thanks
You're welcome. ๐
Regardless, itโs good
Thank you, what did you think of it?