Bebees!

Sorry.

I got word on my phone

And it all works

nah, you’re good. They’re adorable. I’ll post pics in <#801170143849742396> later

But thanks for all the feedback

I’m trying to find a good balance with Meredith and Dylan’s relationship, I don’t want Meredith to be too trusting, but I want her to want to get to know Dylan better even though she knows he’s obviously hiding something

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Hmm... maybe I could make Meredith embody the “keep your friends close but your enemies closer” rather than being so outright trusting of Dylan

Well, and as the story went on, it became a little bit more believable. Maybe it's just me, I know I have a terrible time when I feel that people aren't being honest with me.

There's an interesting quote, I can't remember who said it:
*A lie is nothing more than a betrayal in it's infancy.*

Ooo I like that

Hold on, I have a whole piece devoted solely to the psychology behind that statement.

Libre Office does Word files, and it's free.

I guess... I want it to come across that Dylan isn’t outright *lying* to Meredith, but he’s withholding information from her. I want Meredith to realize it but not get too annoyed at him because they literally just met and she doesn’t like telling strangers her whole life’s story either

Urg... the beginning is so hard

the plot moves easier once they’re friends

I think her relationship with Dylan could be a good plot point as it is now. The only thing I would warn about is having Dylan not know anything

Interesting piece of fiction you’ve written. I like that you base it off of people from today

What do you mean by that? That Dylan is too clueless, or he needs to be more clueless?

Piece for a pathfinder character who was trying to convince some people why *lying is absolutely a big deal ans why you should be concerned about it.*

Armed, do you remember what was the name i put forward for the "general" in my sort of world building phase?

i forgot to write it down and now i cant remember it

You mean you don't remember? *Neeeeeeeeeeeeewwwwwwwww*

I think right now he is too clueless. I see what you are doing with his character and tbh rn it seems like he has adhd, but he has to have some skill or have intelligence that is on par with or complements Merediths otherwise the reader will lose interest

I do not remember, and that was my miniature scream of anguish.

oof

thanks! I wanted to put a spin on “person from our world gets trapped in another world” except the person has been there for awhile and he’s not even the main protagonist

although i do realize it’s a little confusing how long he’s been there given his dialogue

Okay, I see what you’re saying

Absolutely. I'm glad that there are people who can formulate words better than I can in this chat.

He probably does have ADHD, to be honest

That was aimed at Trow but the same thing applies to your story too