Message from @dbel

Discord ID: 819639118170423396


2021-03-11 18:26:23 UTC  

the plot moves easier once they’re friends

2021-03-11 18:27:00 UTC  

I think her relationship with Dylan could be a good plot point as it is now. The only thing I would warn about is having Dylan not know anything

2021-03-11 18:27:36 UTC  

Interesting piece of fiction you’ve written. I like that you base it off of people from today

2021-03-11 18:28:42 UTC  

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/801170162957942885/819637979063910410/Lying.odt

2021-03-11 18:29:13 UTC  

What do you mean by that? That Dylan is too clueless, or he needs to be more clueless?

2021-03-11 18:29:22 UTC  

Piece for a pathfinder character who was trying to convince some people why *lying is absolutely a big deal ans why you should be concerned about it.*

2021-03-11 18:30:14 UTC  

Armed, do you remember what was the name i put forward for the "general" in my sort of world building phase?

2021-03-11 18:30:32 UTC  

i forgot to write it down and now i cant remember it

2021-03-11 18:30:44 UTC  

You mean you don't remember? *Neeeeeeeeeeeeewwwwwwwww*

2021-03-11 18:31:05 UTC  

I think right now he is too clueless. I see what you are doing with his character and tbh rn it seems like he has adhd, but he has to have some skill or have intelligence that is on par with or complements Merediths otherwise the reader will lose interest

2021-03-11 18:31:09 UTC  

I do not remember, and that was my miniature scream of anguish.

2021-03-11 18:31:14 UTC  

oof

2021-03-11 18:31:22 UTC  

thanks! I wanted to put a spin on “person from our world gets trapped in another world” except the person has been there for awhile and he’s not even the main protagonist

although i do realize it’s a little confusing how long he’s been there given his dialogue

2021-03-11 18:31:33 UTC  

Okay, I see what you’re saying

2021-03-11 18:31:55 UTC  

Absolutely. I'm glad that there are people who can formulate words better than I can in this chat.

2021-03-11 18:31:59 UTC  

He probably does have ADHD, to be honest

2021-03-11 18:32:01 UTC  

That was aimed at Trow but the same thing applies to your story too

2021-03-11 18:32:12 UTC  

😂

2021-03-11 18:32:13 UTC  

Ohhhh that’s awkward

2021-03-11 18:32:25 UTC  

Don’t mind me, putting up the shame curtains

2021-03-11 18:33:13 UTC  

😂 you want to read my story? I’m sure it will help you feel less shame

2021-03-11 18:33:19 UTC  

As you ridicule my writing

2021-03-11 18:33:20 UTC  

It wasn't too hard to read. I'm glad I read it overall.

2021-03-11 18:34:26 UTC  

_time

2021-03-11 18:34:27 UTC  

19 seconds remaining.

2021-03-11 18:34:28 UTC  

Yours was the one with the werewolves, right? I read it this morning

2021-03-11 18:34:46 UTC  

🏮🏮🏮 **TIME'S UP** 🏮🏮🏮
Please give your final word count. e.g. `_wc 10573` You have 3 minutes.
@MofoDoggo

2021-03-11 18:34:56 UTC  

Wow the werewolves, secondary characters stand out more than the main character 😞

2021-03-11 18:34:59 UTC  

_wc 10770

2021-03-11 18:34:59 UTC  

@MofoDoggo, Word count updated: 10,770 words (347 new)

2021-03-11 18:34:59 UTC  

All word counts are in! Results shortly.

2021-03-11 18:35:09 UTC  

Imma have to fix that

2021-03-11 18:35:14 UTC  

🏆 **CONGRATS EVERYONE**
`1.` @MofoDoggo — **347 words** (23 wpm)

`_sprint` to start another.

2021-03-11 18:35:21 UTC  

Wiener!

2021-03-11 18:35:54 UTC  

What is the objective of this contest

2021-03-11 18:36:02 UTC  

To type

2021-03-11 18:36:03 UTC  

Lol, it just seemed like the shortest way to describe it. I guess I could have mentioned the color dark red

2021-03-11 18:36:21 UTC  

Ey you got it

2021-03-11 18:36:24 UTC  

Oh, it’s been 15 minutes. I guess I could have joined the sprint, lol

2021-03-11 18:37:26 UTC  

I’m going to cringe when I read my story again

2021-03-11 18:37:36 UTC  

Don't.