but its original sounding, good

I think as the melody comes in in the beginning, there is no hook

expectation cannot be generated from those chords

the most barebones motif would fix that, even just slight changes in timing possibly

I think throwing backing keys will render it complete

To fill the voids

It needs a bass drop.

yeah

backing keys may do it, I don't know what you plan for them

The song increases in tempo as it progresses

When the main melody is reintroduced, it's faster each time

With the left hand playing different variations on the lower registers

How many times have you listened to it?

I've listened to it twice

It's still raw, I haven't mastered it

After I do the backing keys, I'll master it

CREATE A DEICIDE/NOCTURNUS HYBRID!

I really hate my job.

I work as a clerk/payment processor for a fundraising group for several charities and the fundraising group is horrible.

The callers are forced to pretty much force the people they call to sell, and I get browbeaten when I turn down a donation if it's from a teen/very elderly person.

It bothers me when I have to call the same person who donated on the first, again pn the 25th to try to get them to donate again even tho I *just* called them.

And when you DNC the numbers the corporate bosses just put them back on the call list 3 weeks later and we get bitched at for it.

Ugh.

Sorry for the rant. HR does nothing.

I don't even mean to moralfag over it. I just think it's greasy.

I hope I get sent home for poor sales today.

Do you go to school?

Have you thought about the military?

I can't military. I have DQ worthy medical issues in my history

But i finished hs

College starts next semester

I did take asvaab tho

take the civil service exam

what's moralfag

sounds like a terrible job

stock shelves instead

Moralfagging is like

"Thats wrong and i am above it" kinda stance

But it feels scummy how often I hound the same people for money.

Every day. It's the same list.

Of course it's up to the caller to make excuses as to why.