Well-developed senses are op, change my mind 😂

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I haven’t named this poem but i think it encapsulates the current state of the people it goes like this
“Me and my fellow countrymen have seen this government become tyrannical
For this we all know there is only one way through their thick hearts of coal
So if it comes down to it, we will fight them on the beach
We will fight them in the streets
And in our tweets
We will fight until our hearts cease to beat
Not because we hate authority
Because the people deserve to be free
And the only thing they fear is the free people like you and me.”

time to turn it into a song

Where's the rhyming though? I see a little bit but in some parts there is none.

Like how does Thick hearts of coal rhyme with tyrannical 🤔

Yea I couldn’t think of anything that rhymes with tyrannical that fit the context

but then that basically ruins the poem, cause poems gotta rhyme man

rhymezone might have something there, I dunno

Rhymezone makes it alot easier tho

I’ve had the tweet and street thing stuck in my head for months I only just now came up with the rest of the poem

I didn’t intend for it to be put to music as it really was made for a short speech more than anything

Tried writing some plot into the clown idea today; makes zero sense and the setup takes too long

The heart of this idea lies in its lore and the spectacle of it all. It's more akin to Moulin Rogue (which I ironically half hate).

I don't even know what time period to set it in

Is there a way to jump right into (or right before) a moment of action without trying to set stuff up? Just enter into the world?

@MofoDoggo , about your pinned piece -- is it the start of something big, a short story, a middle piece of something? -- just so I know how to read it for accurate feedback.

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